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InSiDeR
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From: Oblivion
Insane since: Sep 2001

posted posted 09-20-2002 03:57

Alright, this painting was originally supposed to be entered in the KY State fair a month ago, but due to vacationing in Brasil I was unable to finish it. I have been working on it slowly for about a year now. It is a painting of an eye, and far from finished. I want to work on it some more lately but I am afraid to tackle it for fear that I might screw it up.



The image is cut off from the right and bottom, I only got what I could fit in w/ my scanner.

I need to finish the blood shot work, the cornia, the reflection, the eyebrows, the eye-lashes, and the skin tone.

I wanted to do the cornia next but I am a little unsure of how to tackle that and make it look as real as possible. And this is mainly to DG. What brushes, what colors, what kind of stroke?

Also a reveiw on the painting would be pretty good too, just a general "I like/dislike this part because..." sort of response. I want to spice it up for the next state fair a year later . So I have plenty of time.

edit: WAHOO! POST 2k!


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[This message has been edited by InSiDeR (edited 09-20-2002).]

DL-44
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From: under the bed
Insane since: Feb 2000

posted posted 09-20-2002 04:59

An objective critique:

1) if this is intended to be a human eye (or anything closely related), there are a great deal of issues with the physical anatomy. The main issues would be these -

- The orbital mass of the eyelids, rather than being the seperate muscles that they are, appear as one ring shaped object. There should be a great deal of seperation - or rather opposition - between the top and bottom.

- The plates of the eyelids appear as though they are turned back exposing the wet pink flesh underneath...where there should be an edge there is instead a soft round mass.

- The caruncula (you know..the pink stuff in the corner of your eye..) appears as a burgundy glob in the corner, rather than the soft pink mass that should merge more smoothly with its surroundings.

In addition, the iris seems far to dark, and a bit tto dull as well. It should be lightened, and there should be a little more visible detail. It could also stand a little bit of a darkening around the outer edge, and unless the person (thing) is standing in near darkeness or on some sort of hallucinagenic drug, the pupil should be far smaller.

And lastly, I would put a greater consideration into the light source. There is no clear definition...but the general lighting would suggest soft light from above, while the cornea and caruncula would suggest a sharp light, one from the left and the other from the right and slightly above.

The technique itself is not bad. The style is somewhat rough, but that is not a abd thing - in fact in many cases it can be a very good thing.

So what it needs from here is a bit more attention to the anatomy, a closer control over the concept of light source, and - most importantly perhaps - an indication that the eye is wet! Your eye is always wet afterall.

Never be afraid to ruin a painting - it's how you learn. It's how you grow. If you do so few paintings that you are afraid to ruin one, then you won't paint enough to learn anyway.




InSiDeR
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From: Oblivion
Insane since: Sep 2001

posted posted 09-20-2002 06:09

fuck nevermind...

i type a fucking page worth and it mysteriously disappears when i scroll up, go figure...

i'll reply later tommorow after school

thanks though jamie

[This message has been edited by InSiDeR (edited 09-20-2002).]

InSiDeR
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From: Oblivion
Insane since: Sep 2001

posted posted 09-20-2002 22:28

Ok..

Yea, its a human eye.

Let me first say that 99% of my paintings are done from an original photo that I look at and based it on. That is how I learned.

In this case I first sketched an eye out of looking through a mirror ( I think I posted it once before no? ). Then I sketched it in charcoal on my canvas. I have totally improvised the color.

- I plan on seperating the orbital mass into 2 flaps but color contrast, ty for pointing that out.

- Yea, thats that color again, gonna change it w/ coats of paint.

- Now I did this completely wrong, IMO it is way to big and it doesn't look to be within the eye/ under the skin. I might just paint over it w/ white and wait for it to dry and just start the damn thing over.

- That iris is gonna change, I just painted that stuff their for boundaries. I plan on adding the texture to the iris and making the pupil smaller. And I will definately sharpen the blurs.

And I will probably add what would appear to be really small tears to show wetness.

Thankyou for the help


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