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fancy_mobile
Obsessive-Compulsive (I) Inmate

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Insane since: Sep 2004

IP logged posted posted 09-24-2004 15:50 Edit Quote

I designed a new website www.IndiaBeauty.com for a client and it is ready to launch .. I appreciate webdesign experts to go through the website and express your constrctive remarks on overall design (Layout, Colors, Graphics, Menu, Header, Footer, etc) .. Your remarks/suggestions really helps me to improve my web design skills..

RhyssaFireheart
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: Out on the Sea of Madness...
Insane since: Dec 2003

IP logged posted posted 09-24-2004 17:36 Edit Quote

Well, just like was pointed out in a prior review you requested (BTW, do you just cut-n-paste the same text over and over again?), your curved elements have jaggies, and they are obvious ones too. The main page just looks... blah to me. The light blue band stops at the head on the right side, and doesn't continue on the left. Why not?

The navigation buttons just look like they are stuck on at the top of the page, and don't fit in with the rest of the design at all.

Why bother to have a body background image at all if you can't see it once the site has loaded?

Main page loads slow as hell on dial-up. Yes, some people still use dial-up in many cases.

I've noticed on all three of the sites you posted, that your main page has one layout, and all the remainder of the site pages have another layout. Again, why? To me, the change in layouts serves no purpose. IN this case, it forces me to reload an entirely new set of images, and to wait while some gratuitous flash is loaded. What is the function of the flash other than to have some random lines and a highlight flash over a round picture?

On the second layout header - jaggies, jaggies, jaggies! You can't miss these, so why are you not cleaning these up before presenting this site as complete?

Second layout again, the top pink "bar" looks crooked. It doesn't look like it's meant to be a gentle curve (probably because of those JAGGIES), instead it seems like you tried to make straight lines and they didn't come out quite right.

Navigation area - it looks like the white lines were just drawn on as a way to show "buttons" without actually making them. Looking closer, the vertical lines don't always match up with the curved lines quite right, with the line between home and makeup actually extending too far. Why even have this element there? If it were flash rollovers of some sort (since this comes up with the flash), then I could understand.

The rest of the blueish "bar" at the bottom of the header - you have it curving to match up with the navigation on the left side, but on the right, it's just a straight line. And again with the jaggies.

Second page footer - the silver curved line isn't even on the left and right sides. The left has approx 3-4 mm of spacing, the right side looks to only have approx 1mm of spacing from the top. If it's meant to be that way, it doesn't. It looks like you were careful with spacing.

Entire site could use a dose of CSS, it looks as if you are using tables for your layouts, and tags to define every bit of type, etc. I'm not even that good at CSS yet, but viewing your code gives me the willies.

Your text needs to be reviewed again. Using justification creates odd spacing sometimes in sentences, and there are some random spelling/spacing issues on a couple of pages.

Why is your home page entirely made up of images?

The model on the main page has a slight glow effect around her. It doesn't look even, and seems to disappear in a few spots around her body.

The slight gradients in the pink areas look.. cheesy in a way. The colors are OK, but it's very flat to me. Why not either pick a different shade of pink (lighter perhaps) or a slightly darker shade of blue. Vary the tonals your using, if that makes sense.

Flash header again (yeah, I know I'm jumping around), the woman on the left in the chair.. she doesn't appear to have any relationship to the site other than as something to hold down some space there. Plus, everything else is very pastelly, and that image is black and dark. Right side - what is that abstract image supposed to be? It almost looks like an angled shot of someone's chin and mouth, with some curved lines imposed over it. Why? Left side has no connection or relationship to the right side of the header.

OK, that's all I can think of right at the moment. Considering how little feedback (none) you've given to the other critiques, I highly doubt any of this will change, but I just felt like venting a bit anyways. It's probably just posted here to try to take advantage of search engines so it looks like you're getting a lot of hits.

JMO, YMMV of course.

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Qui sème le vent récolte la tempête!

DL-44
Maniac (V) Inmate

From: under the bed
Insane since: Feb 2000

IP logged posted posted 09-24-2004 17:47 Edit Quote

I think Rhyssa covered most of the issues pretty well. I'll give my quick run-down though-

1) No Doctype, no encoding = very very bad.

2) tabled layout, spacer-gifs, Flash everywhere for no good reason...

3) *way* too much on the gradients and 'glows'.

4) JAGGIES JAGGIES JAGGIES! As mentioned, thse are so blatant that you could not possibly have just missed them...

5) Geting a user into one layout and then suddenly changing it for no apparent reason is not a good thing.

Quite honestly, this site needs a *lot* of work to be even passable.

A good start would be learning to code yourself instead of relying on dreamweaver.

Get to know XHTML and CSS.
Get to know your graphics program so you can stop having such jagged graphics.

LaSun
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: the dark one with no windows
Insane since: Sep 2001

IP logged posted posted 09-24-2004 18:20 Edit Quote
quote:
Main page loads slow as hell on dial-up. Yes, some people still use dial-up in many cases.



a couple of those pages load slow as hell on broadband too ...

and maybe you should mention how godawful those colours are to the marketing people...

oh hey, DL, how could you tell it was dreamweaver?

(i'm learning too ...)

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no. damn it.

one more thing: 'JMO, YMMV'?!?

(Edited by LaSun on 09-24-2004 18:25)

RhyssaFireheart
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: Out on the Sea of Madness...
Insane since: Dec 2003

IP logged posted posted 09-24-2004 19:27 Edit Quote
quote:
oh hey, DL, how could you tell it was dreamweaver?



I had a feeling it was Dreamweaver, partly because until I stopped (very recently) letting it create my code for me, that's what my pages looked like. Something about that starter script in there that clued me in.

DW does some funky things to code if you let it do all the work. I just finished cleaning all mine up so I can use CSS on the site, and some of the stuff I cleaned out... oof! There were paragraphs that had the <p>, <font> and <span class> tags all applied to the same words lingering from when I would change the site template (yet another scary thing I used, but I did learn from it eventually). I'm not sure how some of my pages worked after seeing all the stuff I cleaned out of there.

_____________________

le coeur du feu
Qui sème le vent récolte la tempête!

DL-44
Maniac (V) Inmate

From: under the bed
Insane since: Feb 2000

IP logged posted posted 09-24-2004 19:59 Edit Quote

all dreamweaver javascript functions start with MM_ (MacroMedia).

I haven't very often seen someone use dreaweaver javascript without also using it for the HTML. The HTML has the feel of dreamweaver code too - all tables, spacer .gifs, way too much code, etc...

templar654
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: Beyond that line...
Insane since: Apr 2004

IP logged posted posted 09-25-2004 18:41 Edit Quote

First off let me say one thing:

quote:
People ask for criticism, but they only want praise.



You aren't going to like what a lot of us say here but you asked for it so you're getting it.

The layout is not something I for one would make. It's ok but seems missplaced and just floating there with no meaning, the color is very blunt as far as I can see and you've used alot of glows; I despise glows and try my best to use as little of them as I can for they distract instead of attract attention especially on that color scheme. You might want to think about that.

Now animations, I've seen this alot. People tend to use Flash in just about everthing even the simplest of animations. The hover effect you've done with the images on the right could have been easily done using ImageReady. Now if someone for some reason doesn't have flash in his system or his browser those links are useless.

Remember to always try to find the most efficent way out not neccessarily the most easiest way. And it's time to leave Mockers like Dreamweaver behind if you want to exceed in Web Design. Switching is not going to be very easy if you're new to HTML/XHTML/CSS etc but it's worth it and there are alot of books and articles out there to guide you.

Finally don't get all hyper on what everyone says here, we're all critics here; hey it's easier to be one than be critisized! I'm saying this because you're Newly Admitted and new comers tend to get freaky sometimes

Cheers

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