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Ramasax
Paranoid (IV) Inmate

From: PA, US
Insane since: Feb 2002

IP logged posted posted 03-02-2002 07:36 Edit Quote

haha, ok I must admit I am a bit apprehensive about posting here, but hey, what the hell. This is my first attempt at a complete website. It is an early working version, so much of the content is still in the works, but before I go any further I was hoping for some helpful suggestions. Am I treading down the wrong path anywhere? blah blah . . .

I think there is to much empty space (you'll probably notice what I'm referring to), just not sure what to fill it with. Am I planning on using this as a real site, probably not, just need the practice. Anyways, here it is:

http://home.attbi.com/~faxtor1/

Cringing,

//ramasax

Patrick
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: Houston, Texas
Insane since: Dec 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-02-2002 10:54 Edit Quote

ok. I like what i see.

However, the colors make my eyes sore and are vomit looking. i would change them. Try www.webwhirlers.com/colors , read the tutorials and what ever you think you should know. Also use the wheel of colors to find a few colors that are nice to the eyes.

Also i looked at your site in 800x600 and there i a horizontal scroll which isn't good. Try and make the bar at the top just a little less wide. The Javascript widows are good but look bulky to me.

Thats it just follow anything emps tells ya if he does that is... you site will work with just a could of tiny adjustments

-Patrick-



<B>Pharo Tek

Emperor
Maniac (V) Mad Scientist with Finglongers

From: Cell 53, East Wing
Insane since: Jul 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-02-2002 13:06 Edit Quote

Ramasax: I'm not sure why you are apprehensive (we don't bite down here). Some quick thoughts:

1. I agree on the colours front (and the recommendation of ZOX's site) they feel a little 'muddy' and could do with being sharpened up.

2. I see all that space and I'm not sure why you've got it there - if it is for content then put some in if not reduce the size or get rid of it.

3. Put the site name in the TITLE tags.

4. In Op6 you have a gap at the bottom of your left menu.

5. PT is right about the small HSBoD at 800x600 its worth fixing it.

6. There is the odd typo

Overall it is a fairly clean and simple design and their are some nice touches (the scrollbar colours work well with that design) - its a promising start.

Emps

Patrick
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: Houston, Texas
Insane since: Dec 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-02-2002 20:07 Edit Quote

sorry for being apprehensive. if i came off that way im sorry that isnt what i intended



Unforgiven

CPrompt
Maniac (V) Inmate

From: there...no..there.....
Insane since: May 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-02-2002 20:53 Edit Quote

Please put in some specifications for font size and font-face in your CSS. When I look at with my text size set to medium everything is screwed up.

On the little windows that pop up I think I may keep the font colors the same as they are on the menu. That dark color and the shadow makes it really hard to read. The Minimize and close buttons are a little too big I think. The green bar has some embossing on it which looks a little strange since nothing else on the page has anything like that.

Yep, there is a little too much white space when I look at it on my 1280x1024.

You need something in there that stands out and says: "WE ARE A WEB DESIGN COMPANY!!!" Know what I mean?

Content is still in the works. . . There are some grammar issues in there but we won't bother with that.

Later,
C:\


~Binary is best~

Ramasax
Paranoid (IV) Inmate

From: PA, US
Insane since: Feb 2002

IP logged posted posted 03-03-2002 00:53 Edit Quote

First off, thanks for taking the time to look it over.

Patrick : hehe, yeah, the colors look good on my laptop, and I just took at them on my CRT monitor and they are totally different. I see what you mean there. I am looking to stay with a similar color set, earth tones. Maybe I can find a happy medium. HS will be fixed also. And thanks for the link, will check it out.

Emps : Title tag, woops. As far as the extra space goes, I have something in mind to take care of that hopefully. All along I was thinking what should I fill the space with, when I should of been thinking do I need it? The answer of course is no. I guess I should install Op6 as well.

CPrompt : Declaring the font specs in the CSS, well I forgot. Will be fixed. As fur as the grammur goez, aye just through that in teir as temptext fer now. I rilly kin right.

Anyways, thanks for the advice. Glad nobody recommended any major revisions. I made note of recommended changes and will implement them whenever I get some free time (I work long hours on the weekends, arghh!).

//ramasax




[This message has been edited by Ramasax (edited 03-03-2002).]

Patrick
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From: Houston, Texas
Insane since: Dec 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-03-2002 03:45 Edit Quote

Woo Hoo my first review was a small success but a success none the less



Unforgiven

Ramasax
Paranoid (IV) Inmate

From: PA, US
Insane since: Feb 2002

IP logged posted posted 03-05-2002 13:27 Edit Quote

Ok, took some of the suggestions in hand and revamped a little. Content, of course, still being worked on, heh. Hope th colors are fixed up.

New link: http://home.attbi.com/~faxtor1/v2/

//ramasax

Veneficuz
Paranoid (IV) Inmate

From: A graveyard of dreams
Insane since: Mar 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-05-2002 14:28 Edit Quote

Can't get the page to load

-= Veneficuz =-

NoJive
Maniac (V) Inmate

From: The Land of one Headlight on.
Insane since: May 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-05-2002 17:38 Edit Quote

ok a few comments on the 'copy.'

Don't think you need 'that is'

Want to create that online presence *that is* so vital in todays competitive marketplace?

willing to take *out* clients by the hand. A bit drastic... but hey if they don't pay.... maybe


You will find that we are *quie* happy to please and taking care of our customers to the best of our ability is goal #1 here.

Forgetting the typo I'm not sure you need all that. How about simply saying: "Taking care of our customers is our #! objective." or "Taking care of you, is our priority."


Way too many *check out* That whole bit there needs to be redone (imo)

To learn more about our company, *check out* the about us section.

To *check out* our other work, visit our online portfolio.

For more detailed information on services we provide, from Logo Design to Web Site Design, *check out* our Solutions.


And, as always, if you have any questions *or concerns*, please send us an email through the contact area.

Don't need 'or concerns.'

Hope that helps


NoJive
Maniac (V) Inmate

From: The Land of one Headlight on.
Insane since: May 2001

IP logged posted posted 03-05-2002 18:35 Edit Quote

Back again...

Here ya go.... Use all...some...or none.

"Are you on the brink of taking your small company into the digital world?
Well you've come to the right place.

Ulterior Design is dedicated to creating a cost efffective online presence, so vital in todays market place.

We too are a small company and like you, we understand the value of each and every customer and client. Taking care of *you* is our number one goal.

Visit both our online "Portfolio" and "Solutions" to see our work, from Web Design to Logo's.

If you have any questions contact us *here.* (link to email) We will get back to you.

Ulterior Design understands the needs of the small company. "

Better no? Not perfect but better.



Ramasax
Paranoid (IV) Inmate

From: PA, US
Insane since: Feb 2002

IP logged posted posted 03-05-2002 19:23 Edit Quote

NoJive, thanks for your suggestions. Yes, the text sucks eh? haha, just jotted that down to have something there to fill the space for now. Didn't even read it through for typos. I do like some of your ideas though, so thanks on that front.

On the part that says, "Willing to take our clients by the hand" hehe Should have been *our*, but I will have a few no-neck italian guys collecting for me, so that might fit.

Appreciate the help.

//ramasax

BTW, besides the text, how'd you like the site?

mobrul
Bipolar (III) Inmate

From:
Insane since: Aug 2000

IP logged posted posted 03-05-2002 19:36 Edit Quote

I see NoJive covered all the text stuff I was going to mention...
Just to make sure a point gets illustrated, this may sound like a repeat. I apologize in advance.

I really don't like when page content refers to links that don't exist.
...or when titles aren't consistant.

You say "...the about us section"
There is no 'about us' link. Only 'about'.
Similarly, the title of the 'about' window says 'about us'.
Consistancy...

Same idea with 'contact' and 'contact us'.

Also, your home page says '...check out our Solutions.'
The link is not capatilized.

Some possible JS problems. I accidently dragged the 'portfolio' window right off the screen...and I couldn't get it back!

Aesthetically, I don't like it...but what's that they say about opinions and rectums...?

These things may all seem minor, but they are truly what makes a good site, a great site.
Keep up the hard work.

mobrul




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