Topic: I need a review... (Page 1 of 1)

the address: www.citygodis.se

Please tell me what you think...



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Hi Hallon! I'll give you a critique on this, OK?

The colors are OK, it's for a candy store, so the pink and rainbow color scheme fits. I thought maybe you could have played more with a "chocolate" color scheme, but maybe that's just because I prefer chocolate, heh. (And I love warm brown colors, as is well known.) Still, the current colors can work, assuming the personality of the store, but it might be too "girly", heh.

The content area is odd to me, so restricted in height as it is. This can work for you, but those vast fields of pink get too much for me. The rainbow border, it seems somewhat dithered on the corners, I think you've made it transparent to a white background instead of pink like you have on screen. I don't know, I might be tempted to try a few other background/framing schemes, it seems to me you can get a lot more mileage out of the whole "candy" thing, this doesn't say enough about that aspect to me.

The girls face, you could do that really sharp and save it as a GIF, it'd be a tiny image in terms of bandwidth. The menu works, but again, it's maybe a little plain, and only three links? It might be nice to show a simplified map so people know which corner it's on!

The games are... well, they're games. But what's the point of them? If you're going to use them as a top-level link, they should be totally rad and cool, these are a bit ho-hum (ie: boring. ;-)

Overall? My take is this. I'd reconsider the long, short box format, and try and use a bit more space, alternatively you could do something more interesting with that pink background. Assuming you stay with this layout, I'd fix the transparency on that rainbow background. Content-wise, a bit more presentation of the candy store itself might be more valuable than those games. Maybe a picture of bins after bins of fresh, yummy candy? Maybe a map showing exactly where they are?

Hmm, my apologies if this is a live site (as it appears it is) and is past revising. I was giving my critiques based on the concept that this was a "work in progress". Hope this helps!

Your pal, -doc-

thanks for that long (puh!) and interesting review.

I try to give you some answers...
chocolate scheme would fit me better aswell, I had a couple of suggestions with a chocolate scheme but in the end it wasnt really my decision...but i think this girly design works aswell ;-)

the corners are changed, didnt see that I suppose you get kinda blind when you work with it...

the girls face...i think i'll keep it the way it is...kind of like it...what do you others think??

the content is a little bit plain, but it isnt really my part....i take care of the design...but its annoying me to...

games...yeah yeah i know....

regarding the map...good idea! coming up, cant see why i havent thought about that...thanks!

the site is optimized for 800*600, and thats why the height is so limited, try and you'll se...probably is that why you think its to much pink...but anyhow (after reading your review another time) i must agree, the pink is a little to much so my next move (well see...) would be to expand the content box and add some nice sweet candy...but i might keep the pink color...well see...

and last...yeah its a live site....but its totally ok to criticize....who's gonna visit this site anyway? i dont know...not me...



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The girl's face is OK in my opinion. I think there is too much pink, even when viewing it in 800x600. Maybe you could use a pink background with some candy bars or something "unpink" it?

Except from that the site seem to lack content. I know that is not your job, but just thought I would mention it Maybe try Doc's idea with pictures of the bins filled with fresh candy, I would atleast like that