Preserved Topic: sarah's last stand (Page 1 of 1)

I thought i would post this here as well I posted it at graphic forums and at deviant art ..

*before i post the link to the piece i first want to shed some light on the situation(some may already know) Several years ago my girlfriend and then soon to be wife. committed suicide while sleeping next to me one night. I woke up the next morning to her lifeless body. I've had a hard time since .. but earlier yesterday i was cleaning out my closet when i found a folded up piece of paper with a poem on it written by Sarah(my love). Since it was the first time i have read the poem i was deeply affected and took my sorrow out by using photoshop so please be truthful and rate the piece please *
http://images.deviantart.com/large/indyart/photo/Sarahs_last_chance.jpg

what do ya think of the piece as a whole the text stands out too much .. Sinic over at Gf pointed that out but other than that what are your thoughts

hi

*loveit*

and always keep up your head :-D

cu
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Well, from an art perspective, I find it...deeply disturbing. Which, I think, you wanted...so it's good, in that sense. Where do the words come from? The english is in places particularly bad, but if that is original text...then I'd leave it...sort of adds to the desperation of the whole thing, I guess.

I hope doing the piece has exorcised a few demons for you. Musta been a bitch living that down...

As for the rest....I'll keep it for myself...

Choke!

That is awsome, i hope it helps....Thanks for sharing it....must have taken a lot of courage

dochappy: A moving story - I hope things are getting better for you and I'm with WS in hoping that doing this was cathartic.

On the art front I think the font is too 'blocky' - I'd try for a more handwritten looking font but that might mean making the whole thing bigger. I'd also darken the text and mess it up a little.

All the best,

Emps

I'd say make the apostrophese more obvious, I had some trouble figuring out what was going on for a bit.


Other than that, Rock on.