Topic awaiting preservation: Sketch dump. Big Dump. New stuff. (Page 1 of 1)

But a slight bit of some reposted material.

I've done all this stuff for my art class since the beginning of the year - the art teacher really pushed me to explore beyond my comfort zones, which I obviously still have, anyways.

So what I'd really like is scathing, hurtful, harsh comments that completely destroy the artwork. Because that helps; constructively.

The photo quality is better than I usually get, but some colors are a tad off.

So:

Painting 1. My first time with Acrylics; reference picture copied. I think it was from a Chicago Art Institute magazine.


Standard.


Monoprints:

Acetone. Experiment. Not too crazy about this.


I believe I got this idea from someone on eatpoo or CA. I forgot. The colors are wierd on the photo though. IT looks much 'warmer' normally.


Orgy. I don't know about the composition.


Flower and rose coral. (I think it's rose coral). First real colored pencils. I hate them. Vehemently.


Drawings:

Wierd colors on the paper and drawings here. I think it's the flash.


Flower from still life above.


Sketches:

meh


unfinished


to be colored. i really like this one.


Speedpaints with an old paint set I needed to get rid of. I think I might do something more with one of them or something.



this one i might try to do differently as a painting. the colors are wierd. it's a lighter yellow orange, and skin tones look peach.




I'm improving, I know that. But C&C?

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The one thing that strikes me about all of these is that they are all.......waiting for something.

They are all on the verge of jumping up and saying something. But...they've either forgotten what it was they were going to say, or unsure which way to jump...

It seems as though you are afraid to commit to your ideas. You have *great* ideas, but they seem a little held back. They all seem kind of like that deep breath when you are about to say something big, but then simply let out your breath slow and heavy and look the other way.

You have a very interesting way of presenting subjects, a good feel for making offbeat colors work, a good sense of form.

Your understanding of anatomy, while betther than the average artist of your age, needs improvement. Overall, you;ve got a grasp on things. The details tear your peices down a bit though at times.

for example -

in 'standard', the 2nd piece- the eyes are far too wide apart, the mouth too narrow, the should too low and unpronounced. getting those details worked up would be a huge improvement, and could make that piece stand out. Getting the shoulder to pop upward, and really define its edge and the subtle bumps and twists of the musculature would make a great line and help your composition immensely.

in 'orgy', there are a lot of little places where a more concise line or a more accurate curve would draw things together much tighter. The back, from neck to ass, of the left figure could really make the piece on its own with a more elegant curve reflecting the shoulder blade, the bottom of the ribcage, and the top edge of the pelvis. The breast and front edge of the pelvis could be made to compliment the backside with great effect. The middle figure needs the line defining the meeting of the abdomen and the pelvis, as well as teh line of the meeting of the thigh and pelvis more defined. The right figure is much better defined in regard to the above mentioned details. that arm is too short thogh, or bends too early. angled outward slightly, and reaching further downward, it would again be a great definining point for the composition.

In the buthcered-girl piece (my favorite of all of these), the hand in the background is very weak. Where the fingers curve around, they are in dire need of some good foreshortening. the head is obviously too large for the body, but that seems intentional and is, in this case, a plus - it works well.

Now, the butchered girl piece is, overall, great. It is the strongest peice in terms of getting its concept out there for consumption - I really love it.

And overall, stylistically speaking these pieces are all great.

Hope that helps, for starters....I'll try to get in some more

quick crit:

they're all good as far as studies go

i disagree with you on the acetone experiment - quite good!

like the last one too

my overall impression is that you should concentrate more on perspective studies

Wow, DL. That's the most constructive series of critiques I've had in a long time

I agree, mostly - and especially on your comment about the 'unfinished' or underdeveloped nature of the majority of the works. I'm not going to blame it on ADD - because it isn't. Much of the time, after doing something I like - a line, some piece of shading, or as I approach bringing a work to completion, I'll revert back to a zone of 'safety' in an effort to 'save' the picture from any mistake I could make; I still hold onto my works far too much.

But that doesn't seem to be what you were getting at. Partly, maybe, the composition could use improvement? Or my pieces are limited because they have no sense of direction? I'm not exactly sure how to counteract this, but I'll try - I think. It's almost a problem with presentation. I'm not exactly sure.

On 'orgy,' I could try to go back in and redefine some of those lines, but it's almost beyond repair, so I'll save that advice for a later piece - maybe I could redo the picture, since I like the idea. But my biggest gripe was the composition - after I'd printed a background of grays, then the pink in the figures, I realized the composition was horribly unbalanced, and attempted to circumvent that with an area of brighter color in the bottom left. I might try adding a curving figure to there, maybe coming from somewhere off the page.

Bleh. Anyways, I'll try to incorporate that advice into my next batch of work. Thank you

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BTW - get over here and add something.

Yes, you do have time.